Selene turns to the birds for help and makes unruly allies in the crows. Vote on what happens next! You have extra time this week, we're taking a break next week so you can catch up on chapters!
Loved the use of the senses. You really brought in visuals, smells, and sounds. This chapter was written in such a rich way. I’m very into the crows being obsessed with crystals for their magic. My favorite part was the eagle swooping in - but I’d say the eagle betrays her and that’s how the queen discovers the child. The eagle called the crows but tells her mom. I’d guess Selene will be furious and surprised since she actually got called by her title by the Eagle. But it will be one of those things where the Eagle is trying to save Selene as the true queen. Or maybe the Queen has an Eagle as a familiar who also gets called and overhears everything and that other Eagle is who tells the Queen. Or maybe it’s the mischievous little hummingbirds. I love that the crows try to hustle her for more crystals + a higher fee - I was like yes crows you are taking risks I’m sure the treasurery is large. I already love/hate them. I like the idea of Selene needing to practice bird songs - I’d say her buddy either the crush is well studied in songs and needs to teach her and somewhere in the singing/teaching there’s a surprise make out (though they agree they can’t go further but it creates an ongoing tension). I’d want that kiss to somehow change the course of things - some form of betrayal.
This idea that the eagle betrays her for her own good is great. Or the hummingbirds selling her out for a hit of sugar water. And definitely have to have some betrayals of people she was in love with, or were in love with her!
I love a story that has visuals, smells and sounds, and it's making me happy to be able to plug images into the Plot Twist stories! I wish I had smell-o-vision to be able to give an even more interactive experience.
Loved the use of the senses. You really brought in visuals, smells, and sounds. This chapter was written in such a rich way. I’m very into the crows being obsessed with crystals for their magic. My favorite part was the eagle swooping in - but I’d say the eagle betrays her and that’s how the queen discovers the child. The eagle called the crows but tells her mom. I’d guess Selene will be furious and surprised since she actually got called by her title by the Eagle. But it will be one of those things where the Eagle is trying to save Selene as the true queen. Or maybe the Queen has an Eagle as a familiar who also gets called and overhears everything and that other Eagle is who tells the Queen. Or maybe it’s the mischievous little hummingbirds. I love that the crows try to hustle her for more crystals + a higher fee - I was like yes crows you are taking risks I’m sure the treasurery is large. I already love/hate them. I like the idea of Selene needing to practice bird songs - I’d say her buddy either the crush is well studied in songs and needs to teach her and somewhere in the singing/teaching there’s a surprise make out (though they agree they can’t go further but it creates an ongoing tension). I’d want that kiss to somehow change the course of things - some form of betrayal.
This idea that the eagle betrays her for her own good is great. Or the hummingbirds selling her out for a hit of sugar water. And definitely have to have some betrayals of people she was in love with, or were in love with her!
I love a story that has visuals, smells and sounds, and it's making me happy to be able to plug images into the Plot Twist stories! I wish I had smell-o-vision to be able to give an even more interactive experience.